Friday, May 18, 2007

Nick - Novel

Blazing Valleys
By: Nicholas S.

The air was filled with the stench of many disembodied carcasses of the scorched, stabbed, and slaughtered. The villagers slowly emerged from their huts. All of them in the same stance, ready for anything that attacked. In this crowd was a boy at the age of 11 cycles, stuck in the middle like a bulls-eye on an archery target, his name was Nicholas Roman. His eyes were bloodshot, for he had been up all night. His pants were tattered, his shirt bloodstained. Though he had gotten no sleep, he was extremely alert. None forgot what happened that precedent night and neither would Nicholas.
As the congregation of village people arose out of their cottages, they held wooden shields and scythes battle-ready.

8 comments:

Mr. C. said...

Nick - Wow! What incredible imagery (I also love the simile!). Do you have more of this novel written? I'd like to see what's going to happen to Nicholas Roman (I wonder where you came up with that ;-). Great job!

Mr. C.

Anonymous said...

thanks for postting this Mr.C!

Nick

Anonymous said...

Did you really write this? Because this is really good for a fith grader.

Will

Anonymous said...

It Was soooooooo! sweet

YES

Hanad A

Anonymous said...

Wooow! Nick you did a great job of writing such a discriptive begining. I can't wait for more!~Sophie :-)

Anonymous said...

great, Nick, i likethe descriptive writing!!!

Cara

Anonymous said...

Nick, this remarkable piece of writing, great job!!!!!!!!!!!!!

-Cara-

Anonymous said...

Nick, Great novel! I loved how you ended it at a clif hanger.

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